Carmen M
We’re honored, Carmen that you chose to share such powerful work on Per.spec.tive:
CAN YOU SEE ME??
A girl gets in the car,
Her mother just picked her up from Juvenile.
No hugs, no kisses, no talking.
Silence fills the car.
The girl gently turns on the radio,
Wanting to get attention.
She ran away from home, trying to escape her fears, not wanting to face the facts,
She was going to jail.
People told her how to act,
She wanted to be herself, do what she wanted.
So she ran, the ride home is quiet.
She asks her mom, “Can you see me, suffering,
Crying for help, Mom, can you see me?”
By: Carmen M.
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Awesome poem. It made me sad.
Posted May 10, 2006, 10:47 amthat is sad…….i feel like the girl, you r good u know that!
Posted May 11, 2006, 4:55 pmThis is poweerful to me. Best line: Silence fills the car. It leaves you wondering what mom will say; we hope she’ll understand!
Posted May 12, 2006, 9:19 amWonderful poetry Carmen! It really has a message.
Posted May 12, 2006, 10:08 amThat is deep. Is this a true story? I don’t know, I’m just checking.
Posted May 12, 2006, 3:47 pmit seemed like a true story i loved it was beautiful
Posted May 13, 2006, 9:39 amThat’s really good. So, suspenceful. It’s very good.
Posted May 13, 2006, 4:15 pmI can’t write poetry, just stories. ^-^
I Love This One. It Was Very Deep And It Showed A Lot Of Emotion.
Posted May 14, 2006, 1:24 pmWONDERFUL! Really great poem, you need to submit more stuff!
Posted May 15, 2006, 12:54 pmNice poem it’s deep and i can feel the meaning it has! The whole poems comes together.
Posted May 15, 2006, 4:56 pmthis is a great poem!
Posted May 17, 2006, 5:50 pmkeep up the good work!
this is a sad thingy. it made me cry. well not really
Posted May 18, 2006, 12:27 pmbut you get the point.
i thought that this was a very expressful peom because it takes alot of courge to put this up and share your feelings with people of the same feelings or desires but it was very good thanks for sharing Jordan S.
Posted May 18, 2006, 1:11 pmthat is a great piece of art. You need to put up another peice of your art work.
Posted May 18, 2006, 1:13 pmi really like this .. i thought it was sad .. i really felt something
Posted May 18, 2006, 1:15 pm“No hugs, no kisses, no talking.
Silence fills the car.”
Wow–sad, yet expressed poignantly. It seems you are able to express yourself through words–I hope beyond hope that this helps you manage your feelings. Keep writing–a writer with your courage and passion will make it far! ‘Oh the places you’ll go!’…
Posted May 22, 2006, 1:17 pmThis really touches my heart *sob sob; Great Job!!!
Posted May 22, 2006, 7:40 pmwow thats awesome. i wish i could draw as good as u write
Posted October 26, 2006, 10:22 pmWOW! That is a great poem!!!!!!!!
Posted November 1, 2006, 10:30 am